Writing blog review – Murderati

This is a great blog for all writers. I like blogs like that. Their slant is through crime fiction but their craft is solid. Murderati is a group of writers and each brings something different to the table. I highly recommend subscribing to the post and testing out some of their suggestions.

Here are some great posts.

Women make the best detectives.

Research on cults

How Editors make a difference.

I’ll stop there because there are so many great post – not all about writing – that I could make this a very long post. Go explore for yourselves.

Happy writing

Perry

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Blog Review – Magical Words

My next blog recommendation is for Magical Words. The bloggers are a writing team and they write fantasy. Don’t jump to that ‘stumble button’! they talk about craft. They just happen to be fantasy writers.

This is my personal soapbox – isn’t it nice, upholstered in natural hemp and a built-in iPod charger – don’t restrict your education to your genre. I’ll step down.

I write across genres so this might have come to me faster than it would have if I only wrote mysteries. Craft is Craft. I learned more about story structure from a romance writing podcast than from any book. Just like I’ve learned more about my craft from bloggers than any book.

Back to Magical Words

Here’s a post about characters – it doesn’t matter whether your character is a high elf or a newspaper vendor, this advice will make you a better writer.

Literary agents – no matter what you write this is good advice about the relationship between author and agent.

I’ll let you explore the blog on your own for more great information, but I have one more thing to say about this team – they tend to answer your comments. And you are allowed to disagree.

Have fun and happy writing – long weekend for Canada and the US this weekend (and July NaNo – woo hoo).

Perry

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Blog review- Linda Clare’s Writer’s tips

So I know it has been 2 weeks since I said I would post reviews of writing blogs. Taking a 10 second excuse break – I was driving from a client site all day last Friday. It was a lovely drive more or less diagonally from the North East to the South West of BC. It left me a bit wiped out though. Excuses over. Here’s my first post for this series.

Linda Clare’s Writer’s tips

Linda is an author and a teacher – you can tell she has teaching expertise in the way she organizes her posts. I find her tips to be useful because there’s more to it than just the tip. She gives examples and makes suggestions on how to apply the skills.

If you don’t yet subscribe to writing tips blogs, I suggest you start. What I found with Linda is that she gives practical advice on craft that is genre agnostic. We don’t write the same things at all, but I find we have faced the same challenges. On occasion I have found the trick that works for me before she posts about it, but as of yet, I haven’t totally disagreed with her advice.

Here are my top three favorites for this month’s posts.

Plot Points

Scene and sequel balance

Story Structure 101

Here’s the link to her blog again so you don’t have to scroll back and forth.

Happy Writing

Perry

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What’s coming up in the next while for posts

Since I finished posting Charity Begins at Noon for critique, I’ve been wondering what to do next with the blog. Under Alice Griffiths, I’ve started doing book reviews and that made me think I should have a theme for this blog. Then it hit me, under the Alice blog, I’m focusing on readers, so under the P.A. Blog I’ll focus on writers. At least for now.

I’ve made a list of writing blogs I follow and it’s pretty long – no wonder I spend so much of my day reading blog posts. Starting next week, I’ll feature a different blog each post and tell you why I follow it and what it’s taught me about being a better writer.

If you are a writer and don’t follow any writer’s blogs, I highly recommend you start doing it. I get craft tips, ideas, new approaches, and most importantly, a place where I can reach out and help other writers.

Have a great weekend – here the forecast is for a good 3 days of spring (good thing since it’s almost summer).

Happy writing.

Perry

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Charity Begins at Noon the final chapters

Hi, the final chapters of Charity are ready for your feedback.

Chapter 55

Leigh passed Winnie to one of the other cops and told us to wait outside. It didn’t work, Val pushed me aside and Lu followed her. I went in to make sure they didn’t damage anything, at least that would be my excuse.

It was hard to see what was going on in the room. There were rows of cages like a rabbit warren. They looked to be three by three foot. There were four women in each cage and all of them started at us with blank looks.

“Emma.” Val called as she ran along the cages. She looked into each cage then ran to the next. She disappeared around the corner before I could stop her.

“Charity, go after her.” Leigh said. “We’ll take care of this.”

I ran to catch up with Val, hoping that Emma wasn’t lying dead in a cage. I could hear her voice calling Emma, sounding more frantic each time. The women in the cages much have realized they were going to be okay because they started making noise, crying and calling out to whoever was opening the cages. I don’t think Emma’s voice would carry through the rising cacophony.

Val was running to the last row of cages when I caught up to her. I didn’t stop her, I just waited for her to finish. Emma hadn’t answered.

“Damn, damn.” Val crumpled in the corner, her sobs shaking her body.

I sat beside her and pulled her into my arms. “Okay, we’ll start looking again. Don’t give up.” I felt my bruises protested as she burrowed into my arms.

“I was sure she’d be here.” She sobbed out.

“Me too, but she’s not, and that’s a good thing.” I rubbed her back.

She pulled back and rubbed her face with her hands. “I guess, at least we didn’t find her body, right? At least we didn’t find her dead.”

Small comfort, but she was right. “Wait until Leigh’s done getting the women out. We’ll just sit here for a while.”

Lu joined us and we sat on the floor with our arms around each other listening to the women leave. I heard the cage doors clank open in the last row and then Leigh stepped into view. “Charity, come with me.” She beckoned me to the far wall. I asked Val to wait and she just nodded.

Leigh reached up and grabbed a chain. Along with the chain came a set of stairs. I realized there was a mezzanine level. Upstairs was a gangway and a small office. “There’s someone up there,” she said.

“Alive?” I resisted the urge to look back at Val.

“They were moving when I noticed them. I think we should check it out before we let Val know.”

When we got to the top of the stairs, I could see the person she meant. There was a woman sitting in a chair, her head hanging, hair falling to her lap. It looked like she was tied to the chair, her arms were pulled back and she seemed to hang from her shoulders. She moved slightly as she breathed, so she was alive.

We entered the office and Leigh knelt in front of the girl. I held my breath as she tilted the woman’s head. It wasn’t Emma. She looked nothing like the sketch Val showed me. There was duct tape over her mouth and bruises that looked like they were a day or two old marred her face.

I felt drained. I didn’t realize how much I wanted it to be Emma. To have that search over and done one way or another.

Leigh was cutting the duct tape around the girl’s hands. I didn’t want to think about how she was planning to remove the tape from the girl’s mouth. Leigh turned to me and nodded her head into the corner. I saw another girl slumped there.

It was Emma and she wasn’t moving. “It’s her.” I confirmed as I walked toward the girl. Emma was lying like a broken doll. Her head resting on her shoulder, arms and legs sprawled. I crouched and touched her just under her jaw line. There was a faint beat. I felt tears rise.

“We need a doctor up here.” I looked at Leigh as I spoke.

“They are on their way, but we need a sister up here too, I think.”

I went to the head of the stairs and called to Val. “Hey, Val, come up here.”

She ran up and looked at the first girl then at me. “No, it’s not…” I stepped aside so she could see Emma.

Chapter 56

It all seemed to go quickly after finding Emma. She came to as the paramedics checked her over. Val went with her to the hospital. Lu and I went to the police station to give our statements. Leigh told us she wouldn’t be charging Emma with anything, so we could take her home. Lu and I headed there to meet her.

I needed to sleep for a week, but I had to make arrangements for Emma to stay with us. My house was going to be crowded but it would be fine.

“Charity,” Lu said as she dropped me off. “Rest, okay? No new cases for at least a week, right?”

“That sounds great.” My bruises were throbbing, my face and ribs were aching and I couldn’t imagine anything better than crawling into bed until I healed. “I’ll call you tomorrow.”

The weather had cooled and it was windy in the marina. I usually loved the feeling of wind against my skin. Usually it energized me. Today it just sucked the last dregs of energy from my soul. I could see my front door from the gate and kept my focus clearly on it. I figured Val would be there, and if they had released Emma from the hospital, I’d have two guests.

“Charity.” Delores voice broke through my misery. “I’m glad you are home.”

“Hi, Delores.” I reminded myself of the kindness she’d shown after the break-in and I tried not to sound too miserable. “It’s nice to be home.”

“Your young friend, Val, was here earlier.” I tried to ignore the feeling that she was about to complain.

“Good, I wasn’t sure if she was home.”

“Well, she isn’t. I have to say, she was a nice girl, but I don’t think you should bringing so many young women into your home. You won’t have a moment’s piece with so many teenagers around.”

“Oh, her sister came, too?”

“Well she had another girl with her.” Delores pulled her cardigan close, she was feeling the cold too, I guess. “They left with bags an hour ago.”

“Oh, thanks for letting me know.” I guess they were getting settled, maybe taking out the garbage and getting Emma’s stuff. “Anyway, I’ll see you tomorrow, Delores, thanks.”

I dug for my keys in my purse and opened my door.

It felt wrong.

There was no mess, unlike the last time. It felt empty. I looked at Val’s bedroom; the bed was folded back into couch mode. Her things weren’t strewn around. There was a note on the counter. My throat closed around tears before I opened the note.

Charity, thanks for everything. Emma is okay, they had drugged her, but she’s fine, nothing addicting. I know I should hang around to say goodbye but I just can’t. I promise we’ll be fine. I have some great ideas for businesses. How about Painting by Val – ha ha. You did a good thing finding Emma. Don’t worry about us. We will be fine.

The last sentence was underlined twice.

I pictured her writing it. I could hear her giggle as she wrote ha ha.

I choked on the first tears and grabbed for Kleenex. I wanted to say goodbye. I wanted to help them get set up.

It took me an hour to cry myself out.

Chapter 57

When the tears stopped I wandered around the house and finally noticed the world outside. It was dark, and I saw lights on at Jake’s.

Great, I needed comfort and he was very good at comfort. I grabbed my keys and a bottle of wine and ran over to his door. It was unlocked so I just walked right in.

“Boy am I glad to see you,” I said to the general direction of the kitchen where water was running.

“Really, it’s nice to be wanted.” Not Jake’s voice. A nice voice though, warm and deep.

“Oh, you’re not Jake,” Miss originality said.

“Nope.” A tall drink of water, long legs, broad shoulders, blue eyes, blond hair, and a great smile, walked around the corner of the kitchen into my line of sight. “He’s my nephew. Yeah, I know that look. We’re the same age, born three days apart.”

“Nice to meet you.” I tried not to drool.

“Sorry, you must be Charity.” He wiped his hands on a tea towel and reached out to shake mine. “I’m Blake.”

“Jake and Blake, your mothers had a sense of humor.” His hand was nice, firm, and warm.

“Yup, but they could have called us Thing One and Thing Two so I guess it’s not too bad. Shall I open that?” He reached for the bottle of wine and I let him take it.

“Where’s Jake?” I handed him the bottle.

“I’m surprised he hasn’t called you.”

“I’ve been kind of busy.” I patted my pockets. “Phone’s at home.”

“His part in the movie grew. He’ll be there for a couple of months. I’m sure you’ll have a message when you get back to your phone.”

“Uh huh.” I said. He poured two glasses of wine and handed me one. “So, you came here to house sit?”

“I needed a place to stay and Jake said I could stay here.”

I clinked my glass with his and gave a silent thanks to Jake for the distraction. “So, you must know some great stories about Jake as a kid.”

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Charity Begins at Noon- the penultimate post

We’re almost at the end. I have to say I’m really looking forward to starting the revision on this one.

Chapter 52

For the next few minutes, we dodged semi trailers and kept two cars between the cab and us. We reached Hastings and turned right, the direction of last night’s warehouse. I felt a surge of sickness fill my throat at the thought of going back.

We saw the taxi turn into the ally behind the funeral home as Lu drove past. We rounded the block and the taxi pulled out of the other end of the ally without his passenger. Lu parked the car and we sat there scoping out the alley.

“She must be in one of those places.” I pointed to the three loading docks facing the funeral home parking lot.

“Probably the middle one,” Val said.

“Why that one? We can’t be jumping at guesses.” I asked.

“I know, but the kid is right. Look, the first one is a retail store. Winnie can’t be up to anything with all those people going in and out.” Lu said.

“Yeah, and the last one can’t be it either. That guy on the loading bay doesn’t look like a snakehead.” Val pointed.

I had to agree with her, he had a gray ponytail and was wearing a collarless cotton shirt over faded blue jeans. By the look of the wood stacked on the loading bay, he was running a handmade furniture shop.

“Yeah, I guess it is likely to be the middle one.” I said and Lu poked me with her dragon red nails. “Call your buddy the cop, again. She needs to figure out how to get inside and find out what’s going on.”

“Ouch,” I grimaced. “You do remember I’m hurt, right?”

“Yeah, yeah, call her.”

So, I followed orders and called Leigh. Again, with the voicemail, this was getting annoying. I get that she can’t tell me what to do, but it would be nice just to have her say hello. I left a message telling her where we were, and that we’d wait until she got here or Winnie left, whichever came first.

Val and I turned to look at Lu. “So, how did you find this Winnie?” she asked, beating me to the question.

“I told Charity already. I was someone with an organization I work with. I don’t know how this happened. Maybe there was a real Winnie. Maybe this woman took her place.” Lu poked me again. “I was trying to help you. You should have asked me sooner. I would have done better with more notice.”

I rolled my eyes. “Oh, that’s so helpful. Blame me for getting in the way of an international crime ring. I’m injured in the line of heroics.”

Lu poked me again. “Oh, yes, and you are such a Miss Innocent when it comes to screw ups.”

“Who, me?” I fluttered my lashes. My pitiful tone got drowned in giggles. I held onto my sides to try to keep my ribs from tearing pain through my lungs. I couldn’t control it. I thought it must be stress, but I looked at Lu and Val, and they had grins spread across their faces and tears squeezing out of the corners of their eyes.

I looked down at my lap in an effort to get control. “Stop it. It’s not the right time for a laughing…”And that’s all I could get out before the giggles took control.

“Stop,” Lu breathed out. “Don’t look at me until I get this under control.”

She was right the only way to control this hysterical fit was to stop looking at each other until we calmed down. I tried to focus on watching the warehouse. It wouldn’t be a good idea to miss seeing Winnie leave just because we were out of control. I forced my breathing to slow down and finally got control of myself. I just couldn’t look at Val or Lu.

My phone vibrated. I checked the ID, unknown number. “Yes.”

“Charity,” Leigh’s voice cut through my barely controlled giggles. “Sorry, I was in the can when you called. I got your other messages, though. Where are you exactly?”

I gave her our location including the make, color and license number of Lu’s car.

“I’ll be there in ten minutes. Don’t do anything stupid.”

That’s so judgmental. I mean, really. What is stupid?

I think letting Winnie get away would be stupid. At least that’s what I thought, what I said was. “Yes, we’ll wait here for you.”

Chapter 53

Ten minutes later Leigh and a second cruiser came around the corner, lights spinning but no sirens. We stepped out of the car to talk to her.

“She’s in the middle building. Go get her.” I thought it was worth a try.

Leigh stood on the sidewalk apparently not ready to charge into the building. “Okay, what do you think is going on in there?”

“I don’t know but I’m sure it’s not a knitting circle.”

She huffed. “I need more than your guess. I can’t arrest her for being in a building.”

“I’m sure you’ll find something going on if you just go in.” I was surprised that Lu and Val were so silent.

“Did you hear anyone screaming? Any shots fired? Does it look like there’s a drug operation going on?” Leigh sounded accusing.

Okay, I guess I understood. I wouldn’t want the police breaking into my house because someone told them something was going on. I just wanted her to do something for god sake. “If the police can’t do something, what can we do? I’m afraid she’ll get away and start all over again in another city.”

Leigh put on a reassuring face. “You can go home. I will keep her under surveillance. We’ll follow her when she comes out.”

Yeah, they’ll follow her and by the time they get around to make an arrest, more women will have been fed into the machine of greed and heartlessness. It wasn’t going to work for me. “Okay,” I lied. “I want to be in on the arrest and I want the story from your point of view.”

“Still acting the journalist?” Leigh’s eyebrow curve up.

“No, I’m not playing. I do write articles.” I hadn’t done it for a while, but I still knew how to get a byline.

“Look, just trust the process. I’ll call you when we get her.” Leigh pulled her phone out of her pocket. “I’ve got your number saved. I promise you’ll get the exclusive.”

“Thanks.” Gee, I practically hand her the arrest and shell keep me posted.

We got back into Lu’s car and stared at each other for ten seconds.

“Emma might be …”

“What were you…?”

The both started talking at the same time. I held up my hand and Lu and Val nodded to me to speak.

“No, I’m not going to just crawl back into my safe house and wait for the police to come to the rescue. We’ve worked too hard to just let them step in.”

“Good,” Lu said.

“So, what’s the plan?” Val asked.

“I don’t know. We need to get the cops in the building. I’m sure there’s something going on.” I could feel my gut twisting with tension. “If there are innocent people in there we need to make sure they are safe. If Emma’s in there, we need to be able to get her out. I’m not sure, what do you think we should do?”

“I’m glad you aren’t going to just rush in.” Lu said. “Before you start dashing around, though, how are you feeling? You must be feeling pain from you ribs at least.”

“A bit but what does that have to do with anything?” I’d forgotten the pain in my urgency to catch Winnie.

“Any plan we have needs to take it into account. I assume you won’t let either of us do anything but plan and support.”

Lu was always the practical one. It never seems to stop her from getting into trouble with me. She just made sure my plans were sensible enough to have some hope of success.

“I guess it’s probably not enough for me to just run into the building and come out screaming.”

“What if you snooped and saw something you could tell Leigh that will allow her to go in?” Val said.

“Okay, that’s simple but I think she’ll need something more than me running toward her yelling, help police, evil being done here. Sorry, I know you are trying.” My giggles were not that far below the surface.

“No, but you have a cell phone that takes pictures. What kind of phone does she have?” Val lifted her chin to indicate Leigh. I could see her on the radio, watching us.

“Same as mine, I guess that meas she can look at any pictures I send. Now we have plan.” I turned and pulled the seatbelt around me, gently this time. “Drive away so she doesn’t have a chance to stop us before we get what we need. Go toward the water and drop me off as soon as you turn the corner. I’ll find a way to look inside. There’s got to be something I can find that will let her go in.”

Chapter 54

Lu drove around the corner and stopped.

Val stared at me and started interrogating.“Are you sure you’re up to this? How’s your pain? Should Lu do this?”

“I’m fine, the pain’s not too bad and I’ll be careful. Besides, how would Lu get this done? She’s wearing three inch stilettos.”

“Hey, I didn’t know I’d be called to action. A girl needs notice for stealth wear.”

“Wish me luck.” I opened the door and ran to the side of the building, well I planned a run but it was more of a fast limp.

Lu drove off and I found myself alone in another alleyway looking at another blue garbage container. The difference, other than the fact it was bright daylight, was there were no broken windows just out of reach, no windows on the alley at all.

I slipped around the corner away from Leigh’s line of sight. It looked like the only way I was going to get a picture was to go in through the front door right through Leigh’s line of sight. I wasn’t feeling too happy about that. And, for a change I didn’t just jump in feet first eyes closed. I called Lu to get advice from my two partners in crime.

She told me to hold on and I could hear her talking to Val, but not what she was saying. While I waited, I watched the old hippie still on his loading bay. He hadn’t noticed me and I hoped it would stay that way. I was going to have to run past him to get to the open door of Winnie’s place and I didn’t need him to try to chat when I got into action.

“Okay,” Lu got my attention back. “We’ll drive back and stop in front of the cops. Then we’ll get out and distract them while you run.”

“She’ll notice I’m not there.”

“Yes, that’s why you’ll have to run.”

“I guess it’s going to work either way. By the time she notices me it will be too late to stop me. I don’t think she’ll try to shoot me. Well at least not to kill.”

“Let’s hope you’re right.” Lu hung up.

I poked my head around the corner of the building and crouched low. I’d seen it often enough on TV, go in low so when someone shoots at head height they miss.

Leigh was sitting in her car. As I watched, Lu pulled up right in my line of sight. That was my cue. I wrapped my arm around my ribs and ran to the door. Just as I reached to open it, I heard a shout.

“Charity, stop right where you are.”

I opened the door further and stuck my phone in front of me snapping pictures as I went. I didn’t go all the way in, I didn’t need to.

I turned the phone around to see the pictures and spun to run back toward Leigh. The picture I held out in front of me was of four cages full of women.

“I told you to stop.” Leigh grabbed the phone from me.

“Is that enough information?” I ignored her reprimand and pointed to the pictures.

“Yes, good thing I called for the other car to come back when your friends pulled up.

Winnie came running out of the door fist raised as though she was going to punch me out. Leigh grabbed her and used Winnie’s own momentum to spin her against the wall.

“You aren’t going anywhere, lady.” She said and then clipped the handcuffs on.

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Charity Begins at Noon – chapters 49 thru 51

I look forward to your comments – and to making the changes based on what you’ve had to say about the manuscript. I think this experiment was worthwhile, I’m getting real insights into problems.

Thanks

Chapter 49

It didn’t work. I crashed into the person who was coming through the door. Thank god, I was smart enough to turn my body to the least damaged side. I encountered softness rather than the hard muscle I expected. The person just grabbed me and turned with the motion. I opened my eyes and looked right into the green eyes of my favorite police constable.

Leigh smiled and propped me against the side of the building, holding me until I got my equilibrium back. When she let me go, the world started to open up beyond my tiny one of pain.

I heard the screams, then they got louder. I started to go back in to stop Jag from whatever he was doing.

Leigh gently pushed me back against the wall.

I pushed back, okay it was feeble, but I couldn’t stop and let the women suffer. “Jag’s in there, he’s hurting those women. Peter Wong, he’s here somewhere, too.”

Leigh increased the pressure on my shoulders. “Don’t worry. We’re on top of everything. Peter is in the car over there and those two are waiting to get Chen.” She pointed to two large heavily armed constables standing at the door. As I looked, they stepped forward and grabbed Jag who had just limped through. I noticed a long tear in his pant leg. Yay me. More people went in, so I could stop worrying.

“I got your message,” Leigh continued.

“Uh huh,” I winced. “Why weren’t you calling me back? I was freaking out.”

“I got all your messages. I didn’t know how safe it was to call back.”

I really wanted to yell at her but I didn’t have the energy. “There’s a shipment of women in the warehouse. They are the only ones left inside.”

“What do you mean, the only ones left inside? Why would there be anyone else, Chen and Wong are in custody.” She paused for a second, but before I could answer she jumped to the right conclusion. “Was there someone else there?”

“A woman came in with them. She seemed to be calling the shots. Didn’t you know that there was someone else in charge?”

“No, this is the first indication that Jag isn’t number one.” She nodded to the waiting cops and they went into the building.

“Look, I don’t want to be a pain, but can you get an ambulance here? I think I’ve broken something.” I could feel my legs give way and a film of sweat cooled on my body. I was about to pass out.

“Sorry, sorry.” Leigh’s voice came from a distance. “Al, get a couple of ambulances here. The women inside will probably need some care.”

She helped me sit so I could avoid falling and breaking something else. “Hang on it will be a couple of minutes.”

“Okay.” I breathed slowly to keep the pain under the threshold of scream. “I left a recorder on the top of the office roof. And my cell phone. I need to call Val.”

“We’ll get it. Charity, I don’t know how much use the information will be.” She lifted my chin so I was looking in her eyes. I guess she was trying to keep me conscious. “You broke into the warehouse which is technically a crime.”

“Sorry.” I didn’t care about that. “Doesn’t the fact that I’m a journalist following a lead make it okay to use the evidence I gathered?”

“Yes, it might work. But, you’re not really a journalist are you? Why don’t we let crown council figure that out?”

“You’ll find enough on the recorder to tie those two to the people trafficking trade.”

“Good.” She made a few notes on her pad. “You getting beaten up and running from the building gives us sufficient reason to enter. Jag will get charged with assault at the least. Maybe one of them will turn on the gang.”

I just nodded. My entire body was throbbing with pain and I really needed to get taken care of. She handed me her phone and I called Val.”

“I’m going to be fine. No, I’m sorry Emma wasn’t there. Don’t worry. We’ll find her. I have to go to the hospital. No, I’ll be fine.”

I could hear sirens approaching. It was the sweetest sound in the whole of my memory.

The paramedics approached and Leigh stepped aside so they could take care of me. There were a few minutes of simple questions and a couple of pokes then I was put on the bed in the back of the ambulance. The ambulance took me to VGH and painkillers took me to sleep.

Chapter 50

The next morning the nurse handed me some Tylenol 3 to take and a prescription for more, and then told me I could go home. Nothing broken, but I did have two cracked ribs and enough bruises to make it painful to breathe, walk, talk, well pretty much everything.

Lu and Val picked me up and drove me to the police station to make my statement. Then I could go home and sleep.

“Are you going to rest after this?” Val asked.

“Probably.” I pressed the button to let the traffic light gods know we wanted to cross. “But don’t worry, we’ll look for Emma tomorrow.

They waited in the lobby of the station while Leigh handed me my visitors pass and led me back into the office to make a statement. The whole thing seemed much tamer when I read over the statement.

I was relieved to know the women were all put up in a hotel and would stay there until the court case, probably a year or two from now. They wouldn’t have much freedom, but I figure it’s better than what Jag planned.I hoped Lu could work out a way for them to stay before the authorities sent them back to China.

The statement didn’t take long. I was walking down the steps with Val and Lu before the Tylenol 3 wore off.

While we were waiting for the light to change, a woman walked toward us. She was familiar but I couldn’t quite place her. She was dressed in this great chocolate pinstriped suit and four-inch maroon heels. Her cell phone matched her suit and she was yelling into it in Cantonese.

She didn’t seem to be aware that there was anyone within listening distance. I felt sorry for whoever was on the other end of the line. They were going to regret whatever it was they’d done to make her mad. She was clutching a cream and blue purse like it was the neck of a chicken she was getting ready for the pot.

I kept looking at the chocolate pinstripe woman trying to drag the memory up from the depths of my brain. Her makeup was a bit too heavy for her age, like she was filling in the wrinkles with foundation. It didn’t work. Lu started to cross the street. I grabbed her arm.

I knew this woman. I just couldn’t put a pin in where I’d seen her. I closed my eyes to block out the distractions.

“What’s wrong?” Val patted my arm. “Do you need some painkillers?”

“Sh.” I needed to concentrate. I couldn’t see her and so all I had was the voice. Suddenly I was back in the warehouse.

It was the woman from last night. And I still had that feeling I knew her from somewhere else.

“That woman was there last night.” I hissed at Lu as I turned to look, all I saw was the woman’s back as she went through the doors of the station. “I know her from somewhere else.”

Val drew me back from the intersection. “Okay, who are the Asian women you’ve met lately? I mean ones that aren’t in chains.”

“Not that many.”

I ran through my memory of the last few days. There weren’t that many new faces in my world in that time. The women from the art show didn’t seem likely suspects. Except for Mary, they were all solid citizens.

“Oh my god.” I grabbed Lu’s arm. “It’s Winnie.”

“What?” Lu looked around mouth open.

“The moles,” I whispered.

“Moles? What the hell are you talking about?”

“The reason I recognized her, the three moles on her eyebrows. I saw them when I met her.”

“I thought she was a victim.” Val said. “You were all wound up about putting her in danger.”

The questions started crowding my mind. “Yes, I don’t know how we got sucked into thinking that. When you think about it, why did she meet with us?”

Lu shook her head. “I don’t know.” Lu grabbed me as I turned back to the station. “ You can’t go back in there. She may not have noticed us before, but she won’t be able to miss you in the station. She’ll bolt and then no one will be able to find her.”

I called Leigh, got her voicemail, again. “There’s a woman coming into the station, brown suit, red shoes and aggressive attitude. She’s the woman from last night.”

“Now what? We can’t just leave it at that,” Val said.

Lu laughed. “Well, we could, but I know Charity won’t.”

Val turned. “I’ll go inside and check it out.”

“No.” Lu said. “It’s too dangerous.”

“She hasn’t seen me. I’ll be careful.” Val ran to the station stairs before either of us could stop her.

“Go get the car.” I said to Lu. “We’ll want to follow her.”

Chapter 51

When she got back, Lu double-parked and turned on her hazard lights. I slid into the back seat, leaving the passenger seat for Val so she could just jump in.

“Hey, see the hazards, asshole.” Lu called to a driver who hadn’t appreciated having to change lanes in heavy traffic.

“Lovely,” I said. “Let’s try to attract as much attention as possible.”

Lu was watching the station entrance in her rear view mirror. I turned to follow her gaze and saw Winne stamp down the stairs right behind Val. “

Val jumped into the passenger seat. “She was mad. The cops wouldn’t let her see Jag. I thought she was going to throw a fit.”

Lu was watching Winnie wave down a cab. “It looks like we’re going mobile.”

I called Leigh and left her another message making sure she knew she could call my cell number.

We followed the cab east until it turned left on Clark. “Shit,” I held onto the seat as Lu slammed on the brakes. We missed the light.

Val leaned forward in her seat. “I can see them. They are stuck behind a Jeep that’s turning left. They are right in front of that red SUV.”

“They will be stuck there for a while.The semis will keep them blocked in until the next light turns green. And we can take off, unlike the semis,” Lu said. “Keep your eye on them.”

Just as our light changed the Jeep made the left and the semis started to crawl ahead.

“Okay that was lucky.” I leaned forward then sat back when the pressure of the seatbelt found the bruises on my chest. “Don’t get too close, but don’t lose them.”

“I’m trying for crap sake.” Lu switched lanes without signaling. “It’s not that easy.”

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Charity begins at Noon chapters 46, 47, 48

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Chapter 46

The engine outside rumbled on but there was no other sound for a few seconds. Then a new head moved into my line of sight, and then another. The women walked to the center of the room, heads down, shoulders rounded, feet shuffling. I strained and heard a quiet sob.

The sound of the truck ramp going back and then the door being rolled down, the rumble of the engine changed and the truck drove away.

“Strip and wash. I can’t stand the stink of the container.” Jag’s voice cut through the hush. The women didn’t move.

Peter said something in Chinese, I didn’t recognize the dialect, and the women dropped their clothes. I heard the drip and splash of the water as they wet the cloths in bucket of water.

I looked back at the women huddled in the center of the room. They didn’t have anyone to phone, no one to sit with them and make them feel there was hope in the future. They couldn’t even talk to each other. How would they help each other through this if they could talk?

I carefully turned my wrist to check my watch. Forty minutes had passed since I crawled through the window. My recorder had another hour of capacity before it stopped working, that should be enough. I don’t think the three of them will be hanging around that long.

And maybe Leigh will come before they leave.

I turned my focus back to the slice of warehouse I could see. It was dangerous to be inattentive. If I made a noise, it would end badly. Getting caught by Jag and Peter would be death for me, my friends, and maybe these women too.

The women had finished their washing and were waiting for their next set of instructions. I saw towels flying at them from out of my line of sight.

I started making rescue plans B and C while I watched.

If Leigh didn’t get here before Jag and his people left, I’d call Lu. She’d have some connections; someone who could take these women in for a while. I’d just take care of getting them out with the mystery man coming to babysit there wouldn’t be any unsupervised time to just run down and open the door.

If Lu didn’t answer, I’d call Val and tell her to call 911. I just needed some cover for a whispered conversation. I could split the women up between my place, Jake’s and Mike’s. Then I would find Leigh and make her help me.

Chapter 47

My hip had started hurting a half hour ago and now my back was starting to spasm. All the new pains reminded my body that I hadn’t healed from the beating, so my jaw started joining in and throbbing in tune with my pulse. It was too quiet for me to move but if I didn’t get some cover noise soon I’d be stuck in this position.

“Finish drying.” Jag shouted at the women. They were standing in a loose group, holding the towels.

“They don’t understand. Shout louder.” Peter laughed as though he’d made the funniest joke in the history of jokes. Then he translated.

“Move,” Jag shouted again.

I needed to see more of what was going on. Watching these women wasn’t helping. They were so deep in shock that they barely reacted to anything.

“Move, damn it,” Jag again.

I heard a thud.

I couldn’t contain my need to see more. It was time to start taking pictures, time to gather some proof. I stretched to peek over the edge of the building. A few inches increased my field of vision to most of the floor and I saw one of the women lying down, she must have been pushed.

Peter stepped into sight and started shoving women into the cages, pulling the towels away as they came into reach.

Jag kicked the woman on the ground as she tried to stand. Her legs wouldn’t support her so she crawled over the concrete floor to the nearest open cage.

Jag and Peter threw clothes into the cages and slammed the doors shut.

“I’m starving,” Jag said, “Let’s get out of here.”

He turned away from the cage doors and looked right into my eyes. “Fuck, what’s she doing here?”

I moved the voice recorder back a bit so it wouldn’t easily be seen and taken. Jag was already running toward the staircase. I could hear the sound of his shoes on the concrete floor.

I tried to leap up like I’d pictured it when I planned my escape route earlier. The problem was I hadn’t factored in the effect on my damaged body. I’d been lying on my belly for an hour and my neck and shoulders were strained from holding my head up so I could see. The small of my back was frozen in position. I wasn’t twelve anymore so the bounce I imagined was more of a groan and struggle in reality.

I gritted my teeth, tightened my stomach muscles and pushed myself up trying to ignore the pain. It’s amazing what panic can do to overcome pain. By the time I was standing and headed toward that window, Jag was at the top of the staircase.

I pushed as much speed as I could into the run, focusing only on the window and ignoring where Jag was. I could only hope for the best and concentrate on getting my body to make the leap.

I could see Peter standing in the middle of the room.

He stared at me and then ran to the front door. He would be there when I landed if I didn’t move faster. Why hadn’t I thought about getting cut off when I found this stupid exit? Okay, Charity, bend your knees and hit the ground running, I told myself as I prepared to launch myself through the window.

I didn’t get a chance to break my leg or neck in the jump, Jag grabbed my jacket and jerked me back just as I jumped. His pull caused me to lose my balance and fall on the metal catwalk.

The pain felt like I’d added a broken rib to my list of injuries, assuming I live.

Chapter 48

The adrenalin spike had dulled all my pains. I could feel them in the back of my mind but in abstract. Fear took control of my brain. I didn’t have anything left to fight back. I just struggled to my feet to avoid being dragged to the stairs on my back.

“Fucking bitch.” He jerked me along to the stairs. “Why don’t you listen? What is so fucking important to you?”

“I’m looking for office space.” My fear-frozen brain wasn’t smart enough to beg for mercy; or, maybe I was just too stubborn to let him see I was scared. Either way as long as we were talking I was alive.

He pushed me over the top step. I struggled to keep my balance. No need to do any more damage to the old body. I made it to the bottom of the stairs without a scratch.

The front door was only three steps away. I tried to run for it but Peter stepped around the wall and stood in my way.

I looked around for the mystery woman but she was gone. Maybe she didn’t like getting her hands dirty for all her hard talk. Maybe I knew her. I reassessed my first guess, could it be Mary? No, she’d threaten Jag’s family and I can’t see the ice queen doing that.

Jag dragged me into the office and pushed me into a chair. “Shut the fucking door,” he yelled at Peter then turned back to me. “You are going to be very sorry you didn’t take our advice.”

I looked up at him. “Yes, probably I am.” I tried to put on a calm unconcerned air, as though it didn’t matter what he did. “I usually end up regretting my impulses. But, I never seem to learn to behave.” I sighed. “Maybe one day when I’m old and wise I’ll change.” The sigh had burned through my lungs. I guess maybe I had broken something.

“You think your friends are going to find this so funny.” He slapped me and my mouth exploded in fresh pain. “That skinny bitch on the North Shore is going to regret it when we break her fingers. Your boyfriend isn’t going to find it easy to get parts when we cut off his ears.”

“Nice.” I ignored the wave of gray that flowed over my vision. I wouldn’t pass out, damn it! “Isn’t that from that Tarantino movie? What was it called again? Oh, yeah Reservoir Dogs.”

“You’ll wish this was just a movie.” He slapped me again, this time it just hurt rather than overwhelmed me.

“Peter, get your ass over here. I don’t want to touch her any more than I have to.”

“I don’t think we should do it here,” Peter said.

“What you think those cows over there will talk? You think they are going to tell the police?” He smashed his fist against the wall. “I’ll shut them up permanently if I have even a hint they would look at a cop.”

So much for an easy escape as they moved me, I hope the recorder was getting this.

“Where’s your gun?” Jag snapped his fingers at Peter.

“In the car,” Peter said, turning to leave.

“Bring something to wrap her in.” Jag leaned against the wall and smiled as he watched me. “It’ll be messy. Get something watertight.”

Peter turned back. “There’s nothing in the car that will work for that. I’ll get some garbage bags from the corner store.”

“Make it fast.” He looked up suddenly. “Wait, when is Hong coming?”

Peter checked his watch, “In about half an hour. Why?”

“No reason, just wanted to know if we would be sharing her with him. I guess not.”

“No, unless you want to wait?”

“No, I’m starving and I want to get home. We’ll be done by the time he gets here.”

With Peter gone, I might have a chance. Jag was mad and maybe he’d get careless. Then again, I was also scared shitless, so we were about even.

There was noise from the women but not enough to distract him. I guessed they could be screaming and he wouldn’t be worried. I looked around for a weapon but couldn’t see much that looked useful, but I had no experience with weapons, improvised or official.

There was the chair I was using, but it didn’t seem heavy or pointy enough.

Along the far wall, I saw a cheap metal desk, painted serviceable gray. If I didn’t have a broken rib maybe I could throw it at him.

The only other option was a big metal garbage can that stood in the corner across from where Jag leaned. It looked like the kind of thing that held garden clippings.

“How long have you been doing this?” Maybe if I kept him talking it could make a dash for the door.

“Long enough.” He crossed his arms and rolled his neck. “You make me think it’s too long in this town.” He glanced through the window as more noise came from the women outside. “Stupid cows, what are they crying about?”

“Maybe they are just realizing they landed in hell.” I kept my eyes on him and slid to the edge of the chair.

The door to the office was open and from where I was sitting, I could see through it to the front door. Peter had left it ajar and if I could move quickly enough I could get through it. If I kicked the chair toward Jag, it would be between us and maybe that would make the difference. A couple of seconds lead was all I needed.

If I got a break from the universe, he would trip over the chair and I’d have more than a few seconds.

“You think they didn’t know that as soon as the door to the container closed in China?” He started laughing. His high pitched giggle was really getting on my last nerve.

I shifted my weight in the chair and grabbed both arms tightly. The pain in my side stabbed to remind me I was holding my breath. I breathed out quietly through my nose.

Jag turned toward the window and started yelling at the women to shut up. I launched my body doorward.

Behind me, I heard the metal legs of the chair screech against the floor and then bang into the desk.

I heard Jag swearing but it sounded a long way behind me. That could be the adrenaline, or shock, kicking in.

I knew that I would only get through the street door if I ignored everything but what it would take to get me there. I had to ignore the sounds behind me, Jag swearing, women crying. It would only work if I believed, believed that Jag was falling over the chair, and believed that my rib wasn’t boring a hole in my lung.

I heard the women start to scream and I saw the door opening inward. I put my head down and wrapped my arms around my chest.

I planned to ram right past Peter before he realized what was happening.

If my lung didn’t explode, I might make it to the nearest streetlight.

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Charity Begins at Noon chapters 43 thru 45

Posting a bit late today – slept like a teenager last night.

Chapter 43

“I could keep watch for you.” Val said. “You can’t just go in there without back up.”

We were getting ready for my assault on the warehouse. I was dressed in loose fitting dark clothes, and we were filling my backpack with equipment.

“I need you here so I can call for help if need be.” I checked my camera and the voice recorder before I put them in. “If you are near the warehouse, they might see you and then you’ll be in danger. I need you out of danger.”

She checked the battery life on my cell phone and then handed it to me. “I put the numbers you’ll need in speed dial. Leigh is on number one. The house number is on speed dial two. You only need those. I also locked it on vibrate. I also set your camera so it wouldn’t make noise or flash.”

“Thanks, I’ll make sure its sitting on something that won’t make noise.”

“Are you sure you are ready for this?” Val started to sound like a big sister. I knew she was worried about Emma and suspected she was worried about me.

“Yes. I have all the equipment. I am prepared to wait all night if I have to. I know how to dial the speed dial.”

She put a bag of trail mix into the bag and added a purse pack of Kleenex. “You don’t need water, but you’ll need something to keep your energy up.”

I was touched. “You’ve really thought this out.”

“Yeah, well. I need you to be able to get Emma out if she’s there.” She dug around in her pockets. “Here, if you get thirsty this will help.”

I took the roll of mints from her. “I will be fine. You don’t need to worry.”

“Yeah, I know.” Her voice cracked. “Look, I kind of like you, don’t get more beaten up, okay?”

I swallowed the lump in my throat. I knew how hard that must have been for to say. “I’ll try. That’s all I can promise. Can I count on you to be safe here?”

“I swear. I’ll be here waiting for the phone to ring.” She shoved her hands into her pockets.

I tried to think of something to reassure her. “Look, Mike gave me some advice before he left.” She shrugged again. “He used to be in private security, Val. I’m pretty sure he knows what he’s talking about.”

“What did he tell you?”

“He said to be careful and to make sure I figured out an exit strategy. That’s why I’m going in so early. I’ll make sure I can get out if I have to.”

She rolled her eyes. “Yes, and if I was there, maybe pretending to be working, I could help you get out if it comes to that. I could call the cops, or maybe get some of the other girls to do something.”

She was not going to let this go. I had to think of a way for her to accept she had to stay at home. “If you did that, you might look suspicious if you didn’t get in a car with a client. I really need to know you are safe. If I am worried about where you are, I won’t be able to keep my mind on staying quiet.”

I pulled her into a hug. She stayed stiff for a second then softened into it and squeezed me back.As she pushed me away again she said,“Okay, I’ll stay here. Don’t get so mushy.”

I grabbed my backpack.“I promise it will be all right.”

I was making too many promises I didn’t know how to keep.

Chapter 44

Thirty minutes later, I stood on tiptoes on the blue dumpster and my fingers could just grip the window ledge. That didn’t mean I could use my fingertips to pull me up. My superpowers were in my other pants. I needed a new approach. I let go of the ledge and crouched down on the top of the dumpster to lower my profile while I looked around and thought.

The rain had stopped an hour before I left my house but everything was wet and slippery. I didn’t need to lose my grip midway through a climb up the brick wall. I’d make a lot of noise even if I didn’t get seriously hurt.

I wiped my hands on the seat of the new black jeans and mulled over a new entry point. From here, all I could see was the drainpipe. Even if I could shimmy up the pipe I’d get soaked and dirty. I wouldn’t be able to lie still for very long in that condition. I suppose I could have done a better job of casing the joint last night. I’d stopped when I saw the window and hadn’t considered a plan B. I really have to work on my contingency planning skills.

It was time to get a better look at the possibilities. I jumped down from the dumpster and walked around the corner of the building, keeping close to the side. I glanced up as I turned the corner, looking for any kind of security device; not surprising for the rundown area there was none. The building was completely detached from its neighbors, which was unusual for this block, most buildings shared a wall.

I could make my way around all sides of the warehouse, it was a tight squeeze between buildings, but I could get through. In my journey around the building, I saw four more broken windows all higher than the first one and no handy ladders lying in the dirt,or ropes hanging to the ground. It was like the universe was trying to stop me from taking up breaking and entering as a career.

So, I was back to the original plan: get through the broken window. I needed to get some height. About four inches would make enough difference. I knew there was nothing in my car to help. I don’t usually need to get taller while I’m out. The only other place I could think of was inside the dumpster. Even if I could get in, I’d come out more pungent than would be good for hiding.

I figured I had another twenty minutes before I had to be inside or give up on the idea, and I had promised Val I’d get Emma out so giving up wasn’t a viable option.

I had enough time to look around the back alleys for a crate or something else I could stack on the dumpster. If I didn’t find anything, I’d take my chances in the dumpster. Before I ran to the first alley I checked to see if anyone was watching; one girl, maybe about sixteen, dressed in a micro skirt, four inch heels, halter top, and umbrella leaned against the building opposite. She didn’t seem too concerned with me. I tried not to think about what put her on the streets.

I crossed over and ran down to the alley behind a row of businesses; a food processing plant, a box store, and a Mexican furniture import warehouse. I lucked out. There was a stack of ten wooden flats laid against the back of the food place. I only needed three to give me the extra inches I needed. It was hard to manhandle three at once but I didn’t want to make repeated trips. I stuck my arms through the spaces in the wood frames and then bent my wrists to form a hook. I scuttled back to the dumpster banging my shins with every step; damn I was going to be bruised tomorrow.

The girl was still standing there. Her gaze followed me as I crossed to the dumpster. It was weird though, her attention seemed to be on something else, something internal. There were no cars cruising by yet, but it wouldn’t be long before the customers, and other girls, would be start showing up.

I put the flats on top of the dumpster one at a time. Then climbed up and stacked them one on top of the other. I stepped on the top of it, a bit wobbly but it would hold and it was high enough.

I could see over the window ledge into the warehouse. I really had to act. I needed time to get inside and hide in the next five minutes so I could settle before the main event. I pulled the sleeve of my hoodie over my hand, pulled the rest of the broken glass out of the window, and dropped them down to smash on the street. When the frame was clear, I pulled myself up and looked inside before I leaped – for a change.

There was a metal grate below me, close enough to make it a good landing place. It was the top of a series of cages. I dragged myself halfway through the window and then managed to turn around and drop feet first onto the grate, then I jumped to the floor. The landing made me gasp as the jolt echoed in my not quite healed jaw.

It was dark and I stood with my eyes closed for thirty seconds to let them adjust to the lack of light, I’d seen it in a movie somewhere. When I opened them again, the light from the street was enough to be able to see around the room. I checked my watch; I had about ten minutes to settle in if I was right and Jag and Peter would show up early to get ready for the shipment.

I looked around; one wall was taken up with three metal cells, each with a bucket, a table, and four bunk beds. The other wall had an office and a staircase. I needed a place to hide and an exit strategy. There was a pile of boxes in one corner; I checked it out. I could hide behind it but there was no line of sight to the rest of the room, and I would be trapped if they discovered me.

The staircase led to a walkway that ran around three of the walls. I could lay on the walkway. I would be able to see everything. But, I would be visible to everyone. If they came in now I was dead. Nowhere to run and nowhere to hid. No way to help Val and Emma.

My mind was running too fast for me to absorb the information. I stopped franticly glancing around and closed my eyes. After a count of a hundred I opened them and started looking slowly around.

I stared at the top of the office. It was just below the walkway and had a raised edge I could hide behind. I sprinted up the stairs and along the walkway. The railing was hip high and easy to swing over. Before I lay on the roof, I remembered to look for the escape route Mike had insisted I have. There was a window along the back wall. If I needed to, I could get back on the walkway and jump through the window before anyone got up the stairs.

I pulled my cell phone out of the small backpack and pressed the speed dial for Leigh. I got her voicemail -again. Fuck!

We’d had a chance to talk this afternoon and she’d sworn she’d be available. I hadn’t told her my plans, just that I’d need her tonight. I left a message to be ready when I called but not to call me because my phone would be off. Then I turned it off.

I lay face down and placed my voice recorder on the inside of the ledge. I would press record as soon as any action started. I had my camera set to night picture and the flash turned off.

I flattened myself on the office rooftop and wiggled until I was in the most comfortable position I could find. Just as I finished fussing, the front door screeched open. I turned on the recorder.

Chapter 45

“Get the blankets out of the office. They’ll be here in half an hour and I don’t want to hang around here. This place depresses me.” Jag’s voice carried well through the empty building and I was sure my recorder would catch it all.

“How many in this shipment?” Peter was voice number two.

There was someone else in the building. There were too many shadows for this to be just the two of them. I could see two shadows dancing around the walls as Peter and Jag prepared for the women. One shadow stayed still in the center of the room; the only movement was a twist of the head as whoever it was followed the movements.

Jag answered, “Twenty paid and got on, probably some loss in transport but I haven’t heard how much. I’m sure it will be in the usual range.” He laughed, “If there’s too many gone we’ll take it out of the captains share.”

Oh my god, they were talking about these people as if they were merchandise, I gritted my teeth to stop from screaming. I had to stick it out and get the evidence.

“Get some buckets filled with soapy water.” A woman’s voice called. I guess this wasn’t just an old boy’s gang. “I can’t stand the stink of them when they get here.”

I didn’t recognize the voice. I knew it wasn’t Mary but that’s all I could tell. I couldn’t take the chance and peek because it had become so quiet they would have heard me shift. I’d look later when there were more people and more noise.

More footsteps on the concrete floor, a whispery, gritty scrape from the dust. Peter and Jag moved into my line of sight, well, at least their heads did. I noticed that Jag had styled his hair to cover a large bald spot on the crown of his head.

I could see Peter throwing blankets in the cages. He didn’t bother to put them on the beds, just threw them on the floor. Jag put a couple of white plastic bags on each table. It looked like take-out; a circular red logo was on the side of each bag. The plastic of the bags was molded around the round and rectangular shapes inside. Jag moved out of my line of sight and then returned with large jugs of water and placed them beside the bags.

“Who’s on babysitting tonight?” The woman again. She was staying by the door and I couldn’t see her at all.

“Hong, he’s only on tonight. This group will be out of here and working by tomorrow night.” I saw Peter pull a phone out of his pocket. He was standing in the center of the room. I could see him from shining black shoes all the way up his European black suit to his spiked head of hair. “What? Okay,” he clicked it shut. “Ten minutes, four of them didn’t make it.”

“Okay, that’s within what we expected.” Her voice was flat and businesslike.

I pictured some kind of evil stepmother type. I really needed to get a look at her so I could make sure I could identify her. I hadn’t been able to get in position to take a picture yet. As soon as the women arrived, I’d take the chance and wiggle over to get a look, and maybe a picture.

“It’s ready.” Peter came back from the corner where he had been filling buckets with water from a tap in the wall. He put four buckets in the center of the room and then dragged over a big garbage can. Jag appeared with his arms full of gray clothes, tee shirts and track pants by the look of it.

“What are you going to do about that stupid girl who’s been snooping?” She was talking about me. I stopped planning how I would peek and started listening.

“You don’t think she’s smart enough to take the warning?” Peter called it a warning; I called it a threat. “I haven’t seen her around since I went over to her place.”

“She hasn’t been back to the restaurant. Maybe she’s backed off.”

Oh my god, she knew I’d been to see Winnie. If Lu hadn’t been able to get her away, I hate to think what I would have exposed her to. I hoped I wouldn’t be regretting my rashness for the rest of my life.

“I guess we’ll find out. If she has, we won’t see her around. If we see her around then she won’t see us coming.” Jag laughed at his own stupid joke.

The woman asked the question that was burning in my mind. “Will you follow through on the threat I told you to make?” She asked.

“What kill her friends?” Jags shadow shrugged. “I guess if that’s what you want. Why wouldn’t we just kill her and be done with it? Killing her friends seems too complicated, too likely to cause someone to snoop around, too Russian Mafia.”

“The Russians didn’t invent it,” She snapped. “You know damn well if we don’t punish her before we kill her there will be repercussions from the top. What makes you more scared, the boss or the cops?”

“The boss, no question.”

“Well, then you’ll kill her friends and make sure she knows how they died; it better be bad. Then you kill her, slowly. If Hong Kong finds out you didn’t they’ll start with your son, then your wife, and you live a very painful week regretting your kindness.”

Damn, I know in my head that woman can be as bloody-minded and cruel as men, but in my gut it seemed worse. Even now, when I knew from my research, the biggest ringleader of snakeheads in the world was a woman. I just hope Leigh got my message and is on her way with the modern day equivalent of the cavalry.

Headlights spilled white light through the open door. I heard footsteps going toward the door from the office area. The engine of the vehicle outside was too loud to be a police cruiser coming to the rescue. It rumbled roughly even though it must be idling. A diesel truck by the depth of the sound.

Two people were talking outside, I couldn’t hear the words over the engine noise, but I could tell it was two men. I heard the sound of a roll-up door open and a ramp screech down and thump on the road.

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Chapters 40 through 42 for your consideration

The action is about to heat up, Charity is gathering the final clues. I know I say this every post, but thanks for the feedback, it’s giving me great insight.

Chapter 40

Val was waiting for me when I got back.

“Feeling relaxed?” She kept her eyes on the screen of my laptop.

“Yep, thanks for asking.” My home looked even more depressing after the color and vibrancy of Jake’s. “Let’s get out of here. I can’t stand this. We can go for dinner on Robson.”

“Is Jake joining us, or did you wear him out?” She typed something in the Google search bar. “I thought you might stay over.”

“Yeah, well, I wouldn’t just leave you here. He’s going out of town.” I stood behind her to see what she was surfing.

She closed the browser.

“What were you searching?”

“Nothing.” She emptied the cache. “Let’s go. I feel like sushi.”

I picked up my purse. Clearing the cache meant I wouldn’t be able to look in the history to see where she’d been surfing. “Am I going to find all kinds of spyware on my computer?”

“Nope.” She stood at the open door waiting for me. “Come on. I’m hungry.”

“No.” I was getting suspicious. “Were you looking for some information on the gang?”

“A bit.” She leaned against the door with her arms crossed. “I didn’t find much. You probably found it already.”

“What did you find?” I could feel ice fill my stomach. If she started to investigate on her own, I was sure I would be looking for another missing girl.

“That there’s nothing to find on the Internet.” She shrugged. “Come on.”

“So, what else were you looking at?”

“Why’s Jake leaving?”

It looked like she was willing to avoid answering forever. I decided to let it go, for now. “He got a part in a movie.”

“What about that show he was on?” She asked, standing on the gangway.

“His character dies. It happens.” I locked the door.

“Yeah, it happens when Jag Chen gets involved.”

While we were at dinner, I my phone rang. The first call was from the furniture company confirming delivery sometime between eight and noon tomorrow. “Great,” I said to Val. “I guess we’ll be stuck inside for the morning.”

“Don’t sweat it.” She picked fries off my plate. “These are great, I’m glad the sushi place was full. Anyway, at least you’ll have furniture. We can try to contact those people from your files if they don’t call back.”

“Shit, I haven’t called them yet. I’ll do it now.” I wiped my fingers on the napkin and picked up my cell phone. I pulled the list of numbers from my pocket.

I decided to start with Lu. I was worried about her, it wasn’t normal for her to be out of contact this long. I pressed the speed dial for her home number, it got through the first ring, and then the call waiting beep happened.

I pressed the talk button, “Hey,” I answered with my all-purpose greeting.

“Hey, yourself,” Lu’s voice came back like she was in a tunnel or something. The relief I felt made me realize how worried I’d been.

“Where are you,” I realized I was shouting, as if she couldn’t hear me because I had difficulty making out her voice against the background noise. “Why haven’t you been picking up your messages?”

“Who is it?” Val’s question drowned out Lu’s response. I shook my head at her hoping she would realize I needed to listen. “What?”

“I said, I’ve been busy and you didn’t say it was urgent.”

“I thought someone had done something to you.”

“Oh, come on it hasn’t been that long. We talked what, a day ago. What’s the deal?”

“It’s been almost two days. I got broken into and I…”

“You got broken into. Why didn’t you call?”

“I did. Never mind. Look, can you get somewhere quieter or with better reception?” I lowered my voice because I noticed the glares of people at other tables.

Val mouthed “Lu,” and raised her eyebrow. I nodded.

“No, I can’t. I’m at a cocktail reception for the mayor.” Lu shouted back. “I’m not actually on the phone while he’s making his speech, I’m in the hall. I didn’t want this information to wait. Can you talk?”

“Okay, go ahead,” I pulled the pad of paper from my bag. If she’d stepped out of the presentation to call me, it was guaranteed to be good.

“Hang on, I’ll go a bit further down the hall, it will be quieter there.” She lowered her voice as the background noise dropped off. “I called in some favors in the last couple of days. One of them got back to me with a time when the next shipment will arrive.”

“Shipment of women?”

“What is she saying?” Val asked. I frowned and shook my head at her.

“Yeah, what did you think?” Lu said.

“Great, when and where? We can get the police on site and they can arrest everyone.” I held my pen poised and ready to record the vital information.

“No!” It sounded like an order, like sit! “You need to know that I’m not a hundred percent sure about this person. It’s a friend of a friend of an acquaintance kind of thing. If it’s not legit you’ll lose any credibility you have with the police.”

Damn, that sounded too good to be true. “Okay, don’t worry we’ll go to plan B.” Like I knew what plan B was.

“What plan B?” Val asked. I tried to shush her. It was hard to focus on Lu.

“I didn’t know we had a plan B.”

She knows me too well. “What about an anonymous tip?”

“It won’t hold up in court, and Jag will assume it’s you. God knows what he’ll do if he thinks you dragged him into court and he gets off.”

I could hear her tapping her fingers on the back of the phone. Gotta love the girl, looks like a hip Asian ice queen but fidgets up a storm when she’s distracted.

“Give me the details and I’ll think of something.” I said with way more confidence than I felt.

“Okay, in two days at ten pm. They’ll deliver a container of people to a warehouse held in the name of Y. Su Holdings. Charity, be careful.” Her voice dropped to the point where I couldn’t hear her. I guess the hallway of a hotel during a political event wasn’t the most sensible place to be passing on information of a sensitive nature.

“I will. Go back to your party.” I folded the phone shut.

“What did she say?” Val looked ready to jump across the table. I gave her a quick rundown of the news.

“Okay, we have to go look.” She pushed her plate away.

“Slow down. We have two days. I need to get some information first, like the address of the warehouse. Let me leave some messages.”

Chapter 41

The next morning, my house started the transformation from an empty shell into a home, again. The furniture and electronics arrived almost at the same time. It meant that the new TV and assorted add-ons had to be put out of the way until the entertainment stand was put up.

“Bedroom,” I said and pointed upstairs when presented with a box that stated night table. Val was trying to shove boxes out of the way of the bigger pieces while the burly guy with the tats on his neck and arms hefted the new sofa bed with the help of the equally burly and pierced woman.

My cell buzzed in my pocket and I stepped out to the finger dock to answer it.

“Hey, Guy.” It was my biker contact. Last night I had left messages for Leigh, Guy, and an old contact who worked on the docks. So far Guy was the only one to call back.

“What did you need?” His social skills were limited when it came to small talk.

“I’m working on a story about the crime level in the areas around the docks.”

“What do you think I can help you with? I can’t talk to you for long, it’s not considered cool to talk to the press, you know.”

Yes, I knew. Guy had helped me with a case involving lost merchandise, in return I’d steered his niece away from a few bad choices. “Do you know anything about a warehouse owned by Y. Su. Holdings?” I put I breathed in the sea air and felt the cobwebs clear from my lungs and head.

“There are lots of warehouses there.”

I noticed an otter floating on her back a few feet away from me. I tried not to believe she was sizing up my newly repaired floats as a mid morning snack. “I don’t care about the other warehouses. Can you tell me about the Y. Su one?”

No,” he snapped. “At least nothing I can give you. Stay away from it. They are dangerous.”

“What, too dangerous for you?” I was half joking. The Angels were serious bad asses, if they thought Jag’s gang was dangerous then I should probably think twice about what I was doing.

“No, at least now right now. We’re working with them. I don’t know how much of a choice we had, but I don’t like it when I have to deal with them. You should back off.”

“I know all about no choices.” I waited but he didn’t respond. I was going to have to ask outright. “I have no choice about finding this place. Can you tell me where the warehouse it?”

“Look, you took care of Annie, so I’m going to keep you safe. No.”

“Fine, I’ll find out some other way. Tell Annie, hi from me.”

“Wait.”

I wasn’t feeling good about it, but guilt usually worked.

“You’ll get into more trouble digging around for that company, or driving around looking. It’s on Pandora and Victoria. There’s a sign on the building, Sun Imports.” He hung up.

Chapter 42

The next morning, we did some shopping for tools of the trade: black tee shirt, black jeans, black socks, black runners, red underwear, a voice recorder and a new memory card for my camera. I decided not to rely on the all-purpose PDA. More equipment equaled more confidence in the quality in my mind. The last thing I needed was to have grainy pictures and fuzzy voice recordings if I needed to convince the police of anything.

We didn’t have the details worked out for the big take-down but I figured that would happen after we looked the place over and saw how I could get in

“Do you think Emma will be there?” Val kept her eyes on the streets we drove past.

“I don’t know. I hope so. If she is, I get her out.” I really did hope Emma was there, if she wasn’t I didn’t have a clue where to look next.

It didn’t take us long to get to Pandora and Victoria but it was dark when I turned left off Hastings. The darkness would make it easier to skulk around, but harder to blend in because very few people hung out in this neighborhood after the streetlights came on. I was glad Val was with me. This was not an area I wanted to be in alone at night.

I drove around the block first to make sure I knew which building was the warehouse I needed then I parked next to a closed store on Hastings and Victoria. We walked the block downhill to Pandora and checked out the building. It looked innocent enough. Well, it looked like a warehouse and wasn’t lit with a big sign saying evil done here.

The sense of silence was so deep here that the sound of the rain dripping off the broken gutter of the warehouse roof was like applause. I felt like I was in the middle of a movie and the ax murderer was about to jump me. My shoulders twitched with the creepiness.

“I need you to keep an eye out for anything suspicious.”

“There’s no one here.” She swept her arm around. “Let me come with you.”

“I won’t be long. If anyone comes…”

“Should I whistle?”

“Yes, then get back to the car.”

She sighed and leaned against the side of the end building in the row of warehouses.

I walked around the building to get an idea of what entry points were available. The only door was in the front and it was solid, no gaps, and no wiggle room. There was a broken window on the second floor that might be useful. And, a big blue dumpster underneath that would get me in what looked like arms reach of the sill. I didn’t think there was much chance anyone would fix the window overnight so it was my first choice.

I checked and Val was still standing where I left her. I started toward her and stubbed my foot on an uneven chunk of pavement. The city maintenance team hadn’t been on this side of Hastings for years. The majority of the buildings were warehouses, like the one I had to break into. Of the others, some had retail sales areas but it was that industrial style, no frills and concrete floors. There were no lights in the buildings and a few of the streetlights were burned out.

I returned to Val. “Do you know who usually works these streets? It’s kind of deserted. I don’t know if that’s normal.”

“It’s too early. Right now, the clients are with their families. Business around here is lunchtime and after dinner.” She shrugged and headed for the car.

I felt in need of comfort food. “Speaking of dinner, let’s walk up to Hastings and grab a pizza.”

As we got closer to the buzz and hustle of Hastings Street, I started to feel less bleak about what I was going to do. We found a bright restaurant and sat at a window table. There was a family of what looked like three generations sitting near the kitchen. They were passing food back and forth, laughing and yelling. I just wanted to pull my chair up and join them.

“When you find Emma, what will happen?” Val played with the ice in her soda.

“What do you mean?”

“I mean, will the police want to charge her with being a hooker?”

I didn’t answer until the waitress had dropped our pizza and plates and left. “I don’t think so. I think Leigh will be more interested in getting information on Jag than charging you or Emma with solicitation.”

“It will be dangerous to talk about them.” She cut the pizza apart and took a slice.

“Unless we catch them in the act, someone will have to talk.” I cut a slice for myself. “It will take guts.”

“Emma has guts to spare.” She chewed the pizza.

“Really, you never talk about her. She’s just a missing person to me.”

“I like to think about the future. The past is done.” Her words sounded practiced. I was sure she’d heard that somewhere and hung onto it to help put aside her present.

“Okay, but if you don’t think Emma will be too afraid to talk, it will still be dangerous. I can’t guarantee Jag and Peter will be off the streets.”

“She won’t be too afraid. She’s really strong.”

“Good.” I tried to sound like I believed her.

“No, I am serious.” Val picked cheese strings from the second slice of pizza on her plate. “She was on the wrestling team at school.”

“Really, that’s cool. I’ve never met a female wrestler before.”

“Yeah.” Val seemed to forget her reluctance to talk as she warmed up to her subject. “She kicked some ass in the competitions, too. She had tons of medals and stuff. She looked after me and my friends too. When you get her away from them, were going to leave the streets.”

“She sounds like a great big sister. What do you think you’ll do?”

“Yeah, no one messed with us when she was around. I got some ideas about what we’ll do.” Val wiped her mouth on a napkin and looked around. “I gotta pee. Back in a minute.”

It must be nice to be so young and willing to believe things will get better. I hoped we would find Emma and she’d be in good shape. The last thing Val needed was to have her last connection to her childhood taken away.

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